Assignment #15

As i reflect back to the beginning of this class. I really didn't expect to learn as much as i did about writing an essay, and blogging. However i did say that i would give blogging a chance, and i did. I still do't like it and i'm still not interested in blogging. One goal was to be a better writer going out as i was coming into this class. I feel i have accomplish that goal, and i have taken leaps and bounds in enjoying writing. As i have explained my disdain for writing. This class has help me break barriers and hurdles that has been holding me back from reaching my full potential as a writer.

Assignment #14

In my portfolio i will be revising my fourth essay should i or shouldn't i. It's not my favorite essay of the class but it is the most difficult essay i have encountered this semester. I have not been able to set an argument with my thesis. I know what stance and position is, but i can't seem to make my thesis arguable without injecting my person opinion into the thesis.

Thinking about peer review

Peer reviewing can be helpful in my opinion. It allows for some outside input into your paper. I personally have a hard time trying to review my peers papers, even though i know they can used the input. Peer reviewing is to much like casting judgement on my peer's paper. I don't like it, but that probably is because i don't understand the importance of having a peer review your writing. I can say that my strengths in peer reviewing is being able to here what my peer is trying to say. More time should be spent in the class on peer reviewing, if your'e going to have a meaningful reviewing of essays by classmates.

My Favorite Paper - My Education Experiences

Now that I am in school, it is funny to think that my favorite paper was about my difficult experiences in school.  The title of the paper is "The Day I Stopped Writing" was a small window into my disappointment of education.  Imagine a student enrolled in advanced classes and scoring in high percentiles, I was left behind in the sixth grade because my teacher did not like my family.

I enjoyed writing this paper because it made me rethink the past in my own style.  Because I was writing about myself, I was able to write how I talk.  I didn't have to give evidence.  It was my story.  I always said I would write a book.  Maybe this was the beginning of that idea.

I think I could add more details to make it more interesting.  I could also write more about what my sister, Wanda, experienced in Mrs. Shirley's class.  Also, maybe giving a time or year to let the audience know why this is important to the time.

How to Write a Good Argumentative essays Videos

I really appreciated the videos.  They gave me visuals to go with the ideas.  The logical patterns were interesting to hear as I never thought about writing in this way.  It reminds me of my brother, June, who is an attorney and how he debates in our family.

The visuals and graphic organizers helped my thoughts get more centered.  It also helped me organize my thoughts and ideas.

Patterns of Error

When writing I tend to write 3 things over and over:  "you", not stating my argument clearly, and minimal evidence.  These errors affect my writing because they distract from the main point and do not strengthen my writing.

The constant use of "you" to find my audience does not create a well written essay.  Learning to write without using my writing like a conversation does not help in academic writing.  Therefore, I need to reread my writing before and try to rewrite the sentences to be direct, without stating "you".

When I am not clear with my point of view, the audience cannot understand its purpose. I need to add more details to my statements to defend my arguement.

Sometimes I think my word is my word:  What I say is what I know?  This is my evidence.  I am learning to build resources to support my main ideas with other supporting details.  This will help considering evidence is part of writing arguments.

Argument Analysis - Why argue?

My topic selection is "Should the Obama Generation Drop Out?" by Charles Murray.  I selected the Argument Analysis topic because I experienced the changes felt by our country during the Obama rise to President.  I believe Murray clearly argues the need to encourage this Generation Drop Out to consider education as an option.  Education is for all.  However, the process and fear of student loans cause people to back down.  There are community and junior colleges that offer two year programs that can improve a person's position in the marketplace.

How does this generation market itself?  Many do not know the insider information to be successful with education beyond high school because they do not have that culture in their family.  Navigating the system can be troublesome, foreign, and out of reach.  It is is a problem that needs to be addressed by making all education programs more accessible for individuals to be stronger people in career options.

Murray says don't give up.  I agree.  Society, government and stakeholders need to be more aware of how education is interpreted before giving up and saying people are not interested.

There is an interest, but the information is not always realistic to people.

Assignment #4- Revisions

It is really hard transition to review and revise papers.  My thoughts are forming in a certain way; and, when I try to revise the paper it doesn't come our right.  What I mean that it doesn't sound good to me.  It feels like my voice has changed.  Maybe not necessarily my voice, but trying to change my style.  I try be concise.  I think I have tried making changes, but it has been a challenge.

Reflections of a Writer

I don't know.  I am not much of a writer.  I remember writing about this same problem/issue in the beginning.  I am still challenged by blogging.  I still see no relevance in this form of communication in my daily life.  However, I see others use it, but I do not follow a blog.  I do follow current events.

Communicating in the world of blogging is different from my own reading and writing experiences.  I do use technology for forms of research, but I have never read consistently through a blog.  This takes commitment; and my schedule does not allow for consistency sometimes.

I do enjoy the writing assignments.  I have experiences that requires reading and responding to positions.  The advertisement exercise and the short essays allow my writing to become concise and more accurate.  I believe my form of mechanics have improved.  I have a better grasp of extending sentences through other forms of punctuation.  This has been very helpful with my run-on sentences.  I have lots of ideas but it helps to have punctuation.

Please let me know what you think.

advertising sales pitch

   

   

• The purpose of this ad is to get you to buy NFL products, as well as taking ownership of your         favorite team or teams. If your"e going to buy a sweatshirt, then you should buy one with your favorite team's emblem on it, or your favorite colors.           
• That's the argument the advertisers are making. Don't just buy a sweatshirt, buy one with your team's name on it. Buy it from us now!!!
• The audience targeted by this advertisement, are professional football fans of all ages, gender, and ethnicity. NFL sports gear is expensive, so i should include those who have expendable income to the list as well.
• The genre is sports. Professional sports will probably share the same idea for advertising sweatshirts or some similar items that they may sell during the their season.
• The tone of this ad is very unique in my opinion, it's tone is of silents in nature,  light on words, or very few word at all. This tone is very powerful and makes you want to represent your favorite franchise when you first see this ad. You  can be warm when you go to the game as well  representing your team.