Assignment #4- Revisions

It is really hard transition to review and revise papers.  My thoughts are forming in a certain way; and, when I try to revise the paper it doesn't come our right.  What I mean that it doesn't sound good to me.  It feels like my voice has changed.  Maybe not necessarily my voice, but trying to change my style.  I try be concise.  I think I have tried making changes, but it has been a challenge.